IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

Some people think litter in public places is a serious problem, others do not think so. What is your opinion?

✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Introduction
Littering in public places has become a topic of debate, with some people believing that it is not a serious issue.
However
Linking Words
, I strongly believe that littering is a significant problem because it can damage the environment and have a negative impact on tourism.
Body paragraph 1
One major consequence of littering is environmental damage. When people dispose of plastic, household waste and other rubbish in public areas, these materials can contaminate the soil and nearby water bodies.
This
Linking Words
 can harm wildlife and contribute to wider environmental problems.
In addition
Linking Words
, poorly managed waste can create unhygienic conditions and increase the risk of health problems for people living in or visiting these areas.
Therefore
Linking Words
, even seemingly small amounts of litter can have serious consequences when they accumulate over time.
Body paragraph 2
Another important concern is the effect of littering on tourism. Tourists travelling from other countries or cities may form a negative impression of a destination if its streets, parks and tourist attractions are covered with rubbish.
As a result
Linking Words
, they may be less likely to return or recommend the destination to others.
This
Linking Words
 can eventually reduce tourism revenue and negatively affect local businesses that depend on visitors.
For example
Linking Words
, Dubai is well known for its clean public spaces and strict regulations regarding littering. Its emphasis on cleanliness contributes to its reputation as an attractive tourist destination.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I firmly believe that littering in public places is a serious problem. It can cause environmental damage, create health risks and reduce the attractiveness of tourist destinations. Governments and local authorities should
therefore
Linking Words
 enforce appropriate regulations and encourage citizens to keep public areas clean.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Explain more fully why some people may feel litter is not a serious problem, then show why you do not agree. This would make your answer more complete.
task response
Add one more real and clear example of how litter harms animals, water, or people. This would make your points stronger.
task response
The Dubai example is useful, but explain more directly how its rules help keep places clean and bring more visitors.
coherence and cohesion
Your links are clear, but do not use too many long cause-and-effect links in one part. Use some short, direct sentences for a smoother flow.
coherence and cohesion
In the last part, restate your main view and ideas, but avoid adding too much new detail. Keep the end short and strong.
task response
Your view is clear from the start: litter is a serious problem. You give two clear reasons: harm to nature and harm to travel.
task response
Your ideas stay on the topic. The example of Dubai is linked well to clean public places and travel.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and a clear end. Each part has one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “However”, “In addition”, “Therefore”, and “As a result”.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: