today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extend do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any revelant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
people
tend to consumed products with high prices
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social media due to better offering and marketing strategies and
this goods
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which
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are purchased not
necessity
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. I
agree
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this
statement in my essay I will explain many ways.
To begin
with, adults who are surfing
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online to look
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currently
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needs and come across
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variety of
advertisement
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advertisements
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in many kinds of subjects.
For instance
, with
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number of influencer in
Instagram
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most of them represent what she wear today or even what she eat or drink today. When youngsters and followers saw that the posts her share immediately, they search
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website
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.
Furthermore
,
this
kind of sharing things are always with high sales and
people
who are saw buying even they do not need because of the impact on themselves.
In addition
, individuals who are living
far
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distance countries
such
as
oversea
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trade online and it takes time but they accept
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waiting.
For example
, the platform called Amazon doing significant marketing and sometimes slightly discount
in
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some products. My best friend just
last
week bought a dress that she will wear on her prom night. The price was extremely
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much
also
not
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model but she
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on advice.
On the other hand
, in a survey published recently in Onedio 69
People
out of 100, said that they are buying
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that they
are not need
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are not needed
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for their daily life. To sum up, with growing social media candidate
people
curious about the what celebrities wear drink or eat and closely follow,
therefore
the amount of money they spend increased day by day.
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