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Some people believe that a country becomes more interesting and develops faster when its population includes a mixture of different nationalities and cultures. To what extend do you agree and disagree?

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Many countries are growing faster and changing their international label from a developing
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 to a developed
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 in recent times. Some
people
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 have a point of view that the multicultural societies residing in the
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 are more interesting and help pace the development of a nation, I whole heartily agree with the statement due to the two reasons.
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, the main reason for a
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 mixed with different cultures and nationalities progressing faster is the large
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 being bilingual. The vast majority of the companies of the
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 need to outsource the business if a particular language resource is not available in the
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 whereas in the mixed cultural environment
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 issue doesn't arise.
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 we have seen an individual living in a multicultural society does face sometimes racism and violence, many countries have implemented rules and regulations to fight them and prosecute the miscreants. To illustrate, The united state of America has the fastest growing economy worldwide as their
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 is mixed with the Chinese,Indian and Mexican individuals who enhance their business as most
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 are well versed with at least one language apart from English.
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, the
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 is a leader in the economic race with other countries.
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, since most of the
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 with mixed nationals are immigrants, the
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 has cheap labour. The wage gap between immigrant and native resident is huge which keep the
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 rich as most of the citizen look for cheap labour for household work.
People
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 who have migrated were not allowed to do the higher-paying jobs so native individuals can earn more.
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, America has the largest number of immigrants and
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 who have migrated do
initially
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 lower-level jobs
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 as cleaner,janitor and housekeeping.
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, the
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 is still making their citizen rich as low-level jobs are dedicated to the other nationalities and own residents are on the top leadership position. To conclude, Not only do different nationalities and cultures bring the business as being bilingual is a great advantage in today's society but they
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 tend to make money by keeping the lower-level job to other nationals migrated to the
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.
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, I agree that a
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 becomes wealthy and develop faster if their
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 includes the mixed nationals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural diversity
  • Innovation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social fabric
  • Heterogeneity
  • Integration
  • Global connections
  • Holistic education
  • National identity
  • Tolerance
  • Heritage
  • Enriches
  • Vibrant
  • Clashes
  • Economic competition
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