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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

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Nowadays, It is argued if parents must get vaccinated their kids for preventing common diseases or if the individuals have the opportunity to choose for their life. In
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, I believe that science during the years has developed our knowledge about health thanks to scientific progress, one example is the
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 vaccine discovered
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 months ago for Coronavirus and it seems that it can be the best
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 for immunising all the population.
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, the issue about the law which forces
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 to get vaccinated is very argued because, according to the Countries principles, one of the most important values is
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freedom which it will miss if the government will oblige the
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 to do something that they do not want.
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 I think that government operates for our beneficial health, I believe that we must decide what is the best
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 for us
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 if
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 do not want to get vaccinated they can do it without punishment by law.
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, I believe that the country could reach
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herd immunity even if someone decides to not get the vaccine but It depends on the particular diseases and the
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 must be provided by science. In conclusion, I think that we have to hear the science and what is the best
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 for her due to the fact that the
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 get vaccinated or not according to the healthy
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 for the population.
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