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TASK 2: Grandparents play a big role in the bringing up their grandchildren. Do you think it is useful for grandparents to be involved? What is your opinion

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 of busy modern ,life parents are not the only people involved in upbringing a child nowadays
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 have a big part in raising
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. I think having more help especially from close relatives can have a positive effect on kids. As is said above close relatives like
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 can be so helpful for
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 being raised. ,
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 in most families both parents are working and having extra help from their parents can be helpful for the kids to be sociable.
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, in a typical Persian family, the mother will be home after lunch so if the kids are with their grandmother and grandfather in that time they would have more human interaction and
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 it is safer for them not to be by themselves
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 can be done by a nanny or a keeper as
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 are related to the kid they feel more responsibility toward them. From another point of view, interacting with infants is an excellent way for the elderly to feel more energetic and alive so playing with
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 are actually benefiting both the
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 and the
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. One good example of
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 is the new urban design policy which indicates that it is better to have a kindergarten near every retirement house as
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 bring joy and energy and can result in vitalizing the area and making a better atmosphere for the elderly to live in and help them feel younger. In conclusion, not only having
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 to look over the
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 is beneficial for the
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 but
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 it has positive effects on the
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 themselves.
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