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advantages and disadvantages of living in small communities

#communities
In today's world, mobile communities are very popular. These
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living
 conditions some times
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loneliness
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 we are going to
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discuss
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 on
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 lifestyle.
Firstly
, with the arrangments of
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 will provide
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 of private space.
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, it
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 your
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family
 to do all desire things and no one will be there oppose you people. You can go for
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 parties and
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arrange
 kiddy parties inside homes.
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 of freedom.
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life style
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 arrangement had
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 of downsides. In case if there was
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 you need support from any of your immediate family
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then
 it will not
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 for you. Due to the small
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community
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arrangement
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 you will always feel alone and there will be
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 for the
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depression
. In these busy materialistic
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 parents not able to provide quality of time to kids to fill full
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 and it will be possible if are in massive communities. In summary, we have both pros and cons with
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arrangement
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instead
 of small it would you always great to be part of larger communities it will
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 between old and new generation.
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