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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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The
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 is now an integral part of modern life
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 of the emergence of the Fourth Industrial Revolution.
Internet
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 technology has undoubtedly revolutionized the way
people
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 communicate with one another. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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 viewpoint.
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 of all, there is no doubt that the
internet
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 facilitates faster
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 between
people
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 dispersed geographically since it facilitates faster
communication
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 between
people
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. Before the advent of the
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, the only means of
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 between
people
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 was through letters. Depending on the distance, it could take as long as a few days, or even weeks, to receive handwritten letters containing only very little information.
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 of the
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,
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 today have not only been able to chat within seconds or make video calls within minutes but the process of reporting has evolved into a much easier and more efficient one, whether it is for the public or private sector.
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, with the advent of the
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, it is now possible to chat and make friends across the globe. Due to the emergence of social media platforms, the
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 has enabled
people
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 from all around the world to communicate much more easily and conveniently than they have ever done before. In spite of cultures that may differ,
people
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 listen to each other's stories and gain a greater understanding, an enhanced sense of empathy, and a greater understanding of
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 and cultures from around the world,
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 strengthening the bond between them. In conclusion, I believe that technological advancements and the
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 have resulted in a reduction of
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 distances between
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 due to the increased utilization of the
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.
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