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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Health
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 problems in the recent era are constantly on the rise caused by fast
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, which is unhygienic. A number of the general public believe the government should increase the tax rate on
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 type of
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;
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, I agree with
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 statement and incline towards the latter opinion for two reasons. All these will explore in the ensuring essay.
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 with, when the price of fast
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 is rising for increasing tax
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 it is not possible for the poor to eat.
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, a recent study found that many children consuming fast
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 during school time, but it is now low down in more countries for increasing taxes on restaurants, bars,
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 courts, etc.
As a result
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, children’s
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 obesity and different types of the
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 problems are decreases,
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, the high price of unhygienic foods make difficult to buy these types of
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, which are hidden save their money and cost of medicine to their unconses mind.
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, creating awareness of fast
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 means providing information to people about unhealthy
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 and how to make
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 kind of
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.
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, much social awareness is a success by camping and advertising, which can help to grow a healthy population.
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 fast
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 is effective for working-person who have no time to make
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, it is not good for the immune system. Despite the argument to the contrary, I very strongly feel a high tax on unhealthy
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 is the best option. In conclusion, it must be said that
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 problems have become a complex issue with no easy solution.
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 but not the least awareness and increasing price of fast
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 is one of the best solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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