In spite of the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry? Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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agriculture is being considered as one of the most prioritized
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in many states, still
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is
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considered as one of the crucial unsolved concerns all around the globe. In
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phenomenon and possible solutions for the same. There are a plethora of
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why still world leaders could not resolve a burning concern like
hunger
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. Two of the main
reasons
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are the expensive food products and poor facilities given for cultivators or farmers. When the food items are going through the chain of supply it always ends up as an expensive product due to the monopoly of the market and unnecessary handshakes.
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result in two or three times the real price of the product.
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cases farmers have to keep requesting proper infrastructure and facilities to deliver the agricultural products on
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. Most of the governments of the developing countries had failed to cater
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there are some short and long term solutions to get out of
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situation. If the
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governments
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agricultural
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while breaking the monopolies and
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unnecessary
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the final consumer price will go down. So, that will be a door opening for more population to consume food which will reduce
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the same
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if the farmers can be given the needful facilities on
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, so they can cultivate and deliver the goods to the supply chain on
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without any trouble. In conclusion,
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there had been many smart moves made in agriculture, the world had failed to get rid of
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. But if the
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relevant
authorities can actually move to ground level and provide some feasible solution we can sort out
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problem to a certain extent in near future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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