Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The population from many countries have always liked
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. Popular
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, make thousands of people sitting in front of their TV. It is even supported that
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like the football world cup are essential in easing international tensions and makes communities feel patriotic without violent actions. I think that
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some good points but not everything.
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,
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, our government are currently organising international
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games or
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cup of several sports. Indeed, during these games, countries are fighting against each other , which may be
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because ,while society
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arguments with others through sports, there is no real war.
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, footballers are fair-play with their
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between them. In
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sense, it may avoid some war or political tensions because
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the head of everyone, sport stays a game.
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the other hand, sporty
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television are not obviously seen by the whole population which mean that sometimes
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put too much importance on these
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, I do not think that sport can release international tensions.
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a game
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consequence to create more competitions between athletes for after but it does not give the desire to kill the adversaries.
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, watching some athletics event keep the communities busy and they forget to think about their daily routines and their problems but it is not essential in order to keep good internationals relation. To conclude, I believe that sports are crucial for
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society in order to avoid people to think but it is not forced to keep good politicals
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. We may think more about what we can control and what we can not.
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