Many people are doing their shopping online on the internet nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping

The idea of buying commodities online has gained popularity but
this
phenomenon has both pros and cons. One of the major plus
point
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of buying things via the internet is that it is more convenient as one is not required to go physically to the stores in search of what they want but check various online
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to purchase the necessities,
then
make payment via visa cards and the goods will be delivered to your address.
In addition
,it saves energy because the shopper need not leave home to the malls to do the shopping either by driving or walking.
Furthermore
, it is
ecological
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friendly as it does not
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any carbon which is
emmited
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by cars as individuals drive to different places during shopping
thus
protects the ozone layer and prevent global warming.
Nevertheless
,there are some barriers to
this
mode of ordering goods which include
scam
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scams

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. Scamming of consumers has
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more rampant because of
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internet hackers.
For example
,a friend of mine bought leather jackets through
ebay
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,a tracking number was given immediately by
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supplier, the parcel eventually arrived and she went to the
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to collect it but
allas
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alas
Dallas

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only to receive buttons.when she tried to follow up the trader,the page was
nolonger
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no longer

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available and
ebay
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could not trace the site
hence
she lost out. In conclusion, the advantages of online shopping outweigh the disadvantages but one has to be careful to avoid been scammed.
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