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Some people think that resources should be spent on protecting wild animals, while others think those would be better used for the human population. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #resources #animals #population
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a
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 ongoing debate whether
funds
 should be used for protecting wild
animals
 or
people
. I will discuss both perspectives in the following paragraphs and leave my thought at the end of
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. On the one hand, it is
fundamental
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 factor to maintain balance in
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
To begin
 with, recently there has been severe climate changes and it has contributed to the extinction of some species of wild
animals
. To be specific, even the endangered
animals
 play significant roles in nature by taking certain positions in food chains.
Therefore
, if one of the species become extinct, there will be unexpected bad results in
ecosystem
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. In
this
 respect, we have to invest
funds
 to protect and rescue the endangered wild
animals
 and take care of them until they have
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 number of the species.
On the other hand
, it is true that there are numerous
people
 who are starving
everyday
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. To be specific, in modern society, there exists a big gap between the poor and the rich. Take developing
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 as an example, developed
countries
'
people
 have plenty of food resources in comparison with
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 of Africans are in hunger. As well as that, rich
countries
 have advanced technologies so that they can deal with some diseases, which poor
countries
 cannot deal with themselves at present. To alleviate
this
 issue, rich
countries
'
people
 should raise
funds
 to feed them and aid them by building infrastructures and providing advanced technologies to overcome the situation they have suffered. Through the aforementioned
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perspectives, the way I see it is even though there are
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 of
people
 who need physical help, we should allocate some
funds
 to maintain our ecosystem by saving the wild
animals
.
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