The best way to prevent people from smoking is to impose high taxes on tobacco products. In this way, people will be less likely to develop a long-term addiction to smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The greatest solution to stop

people

from smoking

,

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is to increase the fee on cigarette materials. As the result, it will decrease the

number

of

smoker

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in the future. It is undeniable that

money

is the main factor of human life, some

people

do not have much

money

to spend

for

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buying tobacco.

Therefore

, perhaps it will lead to less

number

of

addiction

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in

a

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the

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long-term

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.

To begin

with, a major reason that there will have some impacts from increasing taxes

of

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tobacco products is

money

. It is apparent that

money

can run almost

systems

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in the world.

Consequently

, if there any policies to charge more expense in cigarette, there will be some groups of

population

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that will have no ability to afford.

Finally

, they will try to stop smoking because their outgoings are limited so they have to save their funds for other things which are more important than

this

activity.

In addition

, according to less

number

of

people

who are likely to smoke, commercial businesses which are related to tobacco production will get a substantial impact because the sale will decline. It is undeniable that if there are

smaller

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number

of a customer,

therefore

, the business will not run smoothly because the product is

not

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longer needed.

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, from

this

result, they will be a trend to stop producing and stop doing

this

business in

final

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. In conclusion, I personally agree with

this

because it can be easily predicted that if the tax will become more expensive,

people

will try to stop smoking because their budgets are not enough to support

this

expense.

Finally

, there will be less of

proportion

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of

people

who are likely to smoke and commercial businesses will not receive appropriate profits so they

finally

stop.