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some people want government to spend money on life on other planets, however, others think it is a waste of public money when the earth has so many problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 modern era, humanity is sky-rocketing towards space explorations.
however
, there are predominantly two contrasting views where a section of society deems that the government should invest in space projects while others emphasize that wealth should rather be improvised on poor, needy and to those sections of our civilization where it demands a need. in my opinion, ruling governments should deviate funds towards the demanding sections of the community. Apparently,various factors make a section of public advocate that the universe should be explored and they have numerous reasons to substantiate it.
First
 and foremost would be the extinction of natural
resources
 ( fossil fuel and coal). It is an irrefutable fact that due to the overexploitation of these
resources
, there would be a scarcity of the
resources
; it will lead to the endangerment of the human species. In order to provide them with ample
resources
, governing bodies should compose with astronomers and look for sources in other planets as well.
Secondly
, the population is inclining at a tremendous rate,sooner or later there will shortage of living space on earth too .
Therefore
, to overcome
this
 crisis, we have to look for land in our solar system. To illustrate, Companies like tesla is all aiming towards the establishment of the human race on mars by the year 2024 and one package with all the essentials to sustain life on the red planet has already been sent to it.
on the other hand
, some believe that sparing too much on would be a waste and they have myriad reasons to explain it. Chiefly, there are some sectors of our world where the population lives in poverty and they are devoid of
resources
such
 as safe food, water and shed. Political parties
instead
, incorporate some funds into them and improve their living standards.
furthermore
, bills should be saved for future disasters as well .To amplify, the world is still going through deadly coronavirus attacks and investments should be needed in medical care in order to save the life of millions of people. Without that, how the government would be able to facilitate essential needs toward the sick? In my profound opinion,
although
, with the growing demands , It has become rather a need to explore galaxies to replenish and regain the natural
resources
 which are indeed going to extinct in coming future.
however
, I believe that before investing in
such
 huge projects government should spend wage on low socio-economic sectors, so that, quality of life should be increased amongst humans
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • extraterrestrial
  • terrestrial issues
  • poverty alleviation
  • sustainable
  • philosophical advancement
  • ethics
  • biological diversity
  • technological breakthroughs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal responsibility
  • humanity's place in the universe
  • pressing issues
  • critical resources
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