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There is a problem today that copyrighted material such as music, film and books are freely available on the internet with the result that the owners of the works lose money. Do you feel this is a good or bad thing?

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Today's problem concerning the free availability of copyrighted materials
such
 as music, films and books on the internet is a huge matter. Regarding the issue, some people are completely against it and
thus
 want it to be fixed because it is resulting in
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 loss of money for the owners of the works.
Likewise
, there are others arguing
in contrast
 to that perspective and
that is
 because they think it is profitable to be able to watch free
contents
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 on the internet. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides. In my opinion, I firmly believe that
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free access to copyrighted materials on the internet is a bad thing.
To begin
 with, easy access to patented resources is absolute injustice towards the
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makers. They put in a lot of
hardwork
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hard work
 to accomplish a certain project.
Hence
, it is only fair if people watch the
contents
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 in the right way by paying. Releasing someone's project on the websites without their permission is stealing and prior to
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 the makers incur a huge loss. Not only
this
 but it
also
 influences the young generation in a negative way.
For instance
, some
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licensed
 stuff
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 only for adults but
this
 easy reach on the browsers causes young folks to watch a lot of things that they are not allowed to.
On the contrary
, there
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 the public who find
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access to patented resources on the browsers quite profitable as they do not need to spend money to enjoy music, films or books. According to them, it even saves time as they do not need to go to the theatres to see a movie. They can watch it any time anywhere. So from all
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 it seems beneficial to them. To conclude, it is completely unfair to put someone's
liscensed
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licensed
 projects on the websites without their consent. As mentioned earlier in the essay, I hold the view that releasing patented resources like music, films or books on the browser is an awful deed as it results in a huge loss to the makers.
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