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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
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Nowadays, environmental problems and
climate
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change
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 are the most popular topics for all generations. Some
people
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 believe that preventing
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 is not possible for societies.
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, they only encourage citizens to learn how to cope with it.
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, In my perspective, I do not agree with
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 point of view. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my opinion will be examined. It is undeniable that most
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 think that protecting and preventing the environment,
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 as the forest and the ocean, are too difficult, unrealistic, and unbelievable way.
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, they neglect to fix these
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 and tend to find easier solutions. Some
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 only how to live with the hazardous problem.
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, I do not believe that
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 is an appropriate way. In my personal perspective, I believe that encouraging
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 to be concerned about
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 problems
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 as global warming, as well as educating children to learn how to protect and prevent the world would be the most effective way to address these
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 since most of these
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 are caused by
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 and should be fixed by them.
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, if we generate some subjects related to
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issues
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 in school for the younger generation to understand
people
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's behaviours harming the environment, it would embolden them to
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 some terrible habits of
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. Using some eco-friendly products and reducing plastic bags are excellent examples of how to prevent the global warming effect.
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, if
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 neglect these
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 downsides and still behave in the same ways as before, our world will harm and affect not only
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 but
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 animals,
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 as wildlife animals, whose habitats will be destroyed and they will be extinct in the future. In conclusion,
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 should urge and have the courage to prevent
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.
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 will be the best solution and will
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 our earth into a peaceful place.
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, both
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 and animals will live in
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 world peacefully.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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