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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment? Explain some of the - governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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The environmental problems and humans’ impact on them have been heated up these days. In
this
 essay I explain
who
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whom
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 humans can destroy the
environment
,
then
 I will talk about governments and individual
people
 who can deal with
this
 phenomenon.
First
 of all, it is an undeniable fact that human societies hurt nature. The need for more food and facilities for a luxurious life in cities led to destroying a vast majority of natural lands,
for example
, deforestation for tree trunks and killing some extinct animals for their leather.
On the other hand
, in normal society,
people
 using their cars more than public transportation or producing a huge amount of garbage without recycling them can destroy the
environment
. On the one hand, governments should do many activities to reduce the number of humans’ effects on the
environment
.
First
 of all, Authorities must enact strict laws to protect forests and natural resources
as a result
 of reducing the amount of deforestation.
Secondly
, publicity campaigns should be run to inform
people
 of animal rights and environmental problems.
Finally
, developing a tree planting program not only is environmentally friendly but
also
 is a way of reducing greenhouse gasses.
On the other hand
, individual
people
 should help the government to reduce pollution and conserve the
environment
 for the future.in fact, each person individually should protect our
environment
 by reducing garbage and recycling waste disposal at home.
for instance
.
People
 can use water bottles more than one-time or use paper bags for shopping
instead
 of plastic while using both sides of the paper for printing.
Moreover
, if
people
 use public transportation or carpool facilities
instead
 of their own car, air pollution can be reduced. In summary, While humans destroy the
environment
 by their way of life, the government and
people
 can reduce
this
 effect by educating them and improving facilities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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