People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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It is often believed that
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being proficient in the English
language
helps us to secure a high paying
job
,
further
; it leads to a better lifestyle. I completely disagree with
this
statement; as
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it is nothing more than a mode of communication.
Firstly
, we will discuss how
this
expression of speech is not an important factor and sometimes might be a drawback,
secondly
, we will talk about, why good communication skills might help you get a
job
, but later can adversely impact your personal life
instead
of uplifting.
To begin
with, the large number of corporate requires experience
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bundled with in-depth knowledgeable employees, rather than, good speakers.
Furthermore
, there is a large number of states, where a regional
language
is preferred over others
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while selecting a candidate. To illustrate, I was rejected in an interview in CITI bank in Darbhanga, Bihar, because they wanted a regional
language
speaker.
Thus
, it is irrational to say that mastery in one
language
can help us to capitalize on an opportunity.
On the other hand
, one may win a good post through speaking fluently in the British style, whereas, he does lack in basic knowledge with respect to that work profile plus might not be able to justify his salary, as, he was selected on a criterion which
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irrelevant to
this
profile. Gradually, it will lead him to performance pressure, which indirectly will ruin his professional life.
For instance
, Ernst and Young hire every fresher as a management trainee, whereas, they hired me as an audit executive, as
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was having an edge over others in expressing myself. Though my salary was ample,
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I was not well-versed with the required audit techniques. I left the
job
after 3 months, as it turned out to be highly depressing for me.
Therefore
, it is the relevant qualification bundled with experience that matters, not speech. To recapitulate, one must be capable of meeting the requirements of the
job
, to seize a good compensating opportunity, rather than, being an expert in English.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literate in English
  • global job opportunities
  • multinational companies
  • working language
  • educational opportunities
  • higher qualifications
  • job prospects
  • industries
  • technology, finance, healthcare
  • key skill
  • higher-paying jobs
  • proficiency
  • standard of living
  • facilitate immigration
  • remote working opportunities
  • income stability
  • non-English-speaking countries
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