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*Some people believe it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try hard and improve such situations* *Discuss both views and give your opinion*

Some people argue that it is wiser to accept difficult circumstances,
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 as an unfulfilling job or financial hardship, rather than attempting to change them. Others,
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, believe that
individuals
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 should strive to improve their situations. In my view,
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 acceptance may sometimes be necessary, making efforts to overcome challenges is generally more beneficial. On the one hand, accepting adverse conditions can help people maintain stability and avoid unnecessary stress.
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, someone who remains in a modest job despite limited satisfaction may still enjoy job security and a steady income, which are crucial for supporting a family.
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, acceptance can foster resilience, teaching
individuals
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 to adapt and find contentment even in less-than-ideal circumstances. In societies where opportunities are scarce,
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 mindset can prevent frustration and promote mental well-being.
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, actively seeking improvement often leads to personal growth and greater
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. People who pursue better employment or strive to increase their income are more likely to achieve financial independence and professional satisfaction.
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, many successful entrepreneurs began with limited resources but refused to settle for mediocrity, ultimately transforming their lives through persistence and innovation.
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, striving for change can inspire others and contribute positively to society, as ambitious
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 often create new opportunities and drive progress. In conclusion,
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 accepting difficult situations may sometimes be practical, I believe that making consistent efforts to improve them is a more rewarding approach. By embracing challenges and seeking solutions,
individuals
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 not only enhance their own lives but
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 contribute to the advancement of their communities.

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task
Task response: The answer shows a clear view and talks about both sides with good examples. To raise the score, add a sharper final sentence that states your own view very clearly.
coherence
Coherence: Paragraphs link well, but add stronger topic sentences at the start of each paragraph and use smooth link words to guide the reader.
overview
Clear view stated in the introduction and conclusion
content
Balanced view with real examples
structure
Consistent linking words between ideas
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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