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Some people think that parents should set strict rules for their children if they want them to succeed in life. Others think that strict rules are not necessary for children to obtain success. Which do you think is better?

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Parents every
time
 worry about their
children
 and think about how can help them to be successful in their future
life
. Some think that strict rules are necessary for
children
 and lead them to success while others disagree with them. In my idea,
although
 though regulation has some benefits for
children
, it has several significant drawbacks. On the one hand, when parents set strict rules in their home and all families should do those;
firstly
children
 learn discipline in order to do regulated tasks.
secondly
, they can use their
time
 better and learn more things occasionally
instead
 of wasting their
time
 every day.
For example
, some fathers and mothers have to their
children
 go to bed and wake up at an exact
time
 every day that it is the primary rule for having discipline in entire of
children
’s
life
.
Also
, some
children
 ought to learn many extracurriculars in their free
time
 that some of them could be beneficial for their future.
However
, these two advantages can bring success for
children
 frequently.
On the other hand
, if
children
 have to do many regulation tasks, it is like that they cannot make a decision for their
life
 and it is
in contrast
 with independence which plays a key role in success.
Additionally
, imagination and geniuses may disappear in
children
life
 because of cannot choose what they want to do.
For instance
, sometimes,
children
 like to learn some skills like dance or acrobats but their parents think that learning these things are not essential for them and even are not appropriate while, maybe they are talented on
this
 skill. To conclude, some regulation is necessary for all people but tough one should be avoided especially for
children
 because can make them disappointed and even make some weakness people in the future that can not be successful.
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