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it is better for live away from the home during their University studies rather than staying with their parents. to what extent you agree or disagree

#home #university #studies #parents
It is commonly believed that staying away from home is good as compared to living with family while pursuing higher studies from
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college. I completely agree with the given statement and there are two reasons why I think so and they will be explained in the
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academics. It is a
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 fact that staying away from the house can enable people to stay away from the household
distarctions
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distractions
 and domestic works and individuals can better concentrate on their exams and studies.
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, students living in rented
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accommodation
 near to the college can get in touch physically with the university faculties easily and can access help from them.
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 their studies. The
second
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reason
 for my view is that youngsters can become self
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. Needless to say that living independently will teach the harsh reality of the world and will give the students
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real exposure to the outside world and youngsters will spend the money wisely. To
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, students staying outside can save
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money for future works.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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