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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: There is no doubt that globalisation has benefited the world by bringing together people, business and nations. People who criticise it stand in the way of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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It is undeniable that
the
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global economic growth has a massive advantage to our society by improving the interconnection among the people and expanding the local business.
Nonetheless
, critics strongly deny
this
 notion and prevent industrial development. Personally, I partially agree that globalisation has a positive impact on our society and that the reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. The
first
 and foremost reason is that without
the
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economical development, the modern world would be a difficult place to adapt
in
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.
For instance
, if the nation doesn't have income from other countries, there won't be any money to fund the public sectors
such
 as healthcare, transportation and so on.
This
 declines the opportunities for the citizens, making the world a very inconvenient place to live in. Not only that
,
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the
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industrialisation
also
 creates vacancies owing to the expansion of the factories.
Therefore
, the unemployment rate sharply decelerates as people earn their jobs with
a moderate or well-paid wages
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.
This
 proves that globalisation
ease
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 our ways of living.
On the other hand
, opposers can argue about the fact that it causes pollution and
destruction
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 of biodiversity.
This
 is because of the emission of toxic chemicals from the factories, leading to global warming and
intoxication
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 of the aquatic species.
Furthermore
, changes in the surrounding temperature and weather
has
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 a tremendous effect on wildlife habitats.
This
 issue can
further
 lead to the loss of natural habitat and extinction.
Hence
,
the
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environmentalists and other wildlife conservators are greatly concerned about the negative consequences. To sum up,
although
 globalisation has brought people closer to one another, creating a much more convenient way to live
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, there are
also
 downsides correlating to the economical expansion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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