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Museums should display art of their own country or they should display art from all our the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Museums
 are the collection of archaeology
which
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 studies
about
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the
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human activity
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through
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though
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through
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 the recovery and
analyse
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 of material culture. Archaeology can be considered both social science and
branch
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the branch
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 of humanities. Now, the question
arise
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 about the display of
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artwork
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art work
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artwork
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 of their own
country
 or all over the
world
. In my opinion, the government of
country
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a country
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 should make
facility
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facilities
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 for both
kind
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kinds
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 of
museums
.
Firstly
, the
museums
 which
shows
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 the art of their own nation are
history
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the history
a history
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 of a particular region.
For example
,
last
 year I went to Rajasthan where
i
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 had an opportunity to visit different forts. Each
forts
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fort
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 has its own museum which
provide
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 information about their kingdom and kings, how long their dynasty was, in
domain
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the domain
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 who was their
cabnet
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cabinet
 members and what strategies they used to tackle their troops.
Additionally
,
museums
 of their own land remind us of our great and rich culture and heritage.
Hence
, the
museums
 are essential to
remind
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 us of our past and history.
Secondly
, the
museums
 which exhibit the art of the
world
 is
the
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a
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 huge success for the government of the
country
 because collecting information and materials from around the
world
 requires
lot
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 of men work, time and energy. Things which are collected in international
museums
 gives a vast knowledge to our society about their different cultures of the
world
.
For instance
,
european
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European
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 countries have
very
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a very
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 different
style
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styles
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 and
way
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ways
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 of living as compared to north
american
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American
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 countries.
Moreover
, these
museums
helps
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 us to generate more revenue which is very beneficial for the development of the
country
. So, these
museums
 are indispensable to understand
different
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a different
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culture
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cultures
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 and to make income. To conclude, countries should focus on both kinds of
museums
 as each and every museum has
it
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its
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 own importance in
an
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a
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 unique way. People learn different
kind
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kinds
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 of new things which will be helpful in their future.
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