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Director Community Child Health Service 1 Southgate Ave Melbourne Vctoria 3006 25/07/2019 Dear Sir /Madam Re: Akeera Annaisha Age:5 years I am writing to request follow-up of vaccination programme for

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Annaisa, a five year old child and her two year old sister, Emica Yamato,members of an immigrant family from Japan.

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was admitted to our hospital on July 15 for treatment of acute meningoencephalitis following mumps. She has recovered well and is being discharged today.

Akira

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and America were born in Japan. The family consisting of their father, Mr Hoshi Hikaru and mother, Ms Eri Emiko had migrated to Australia in April 2019 and presently lives in rental accommodation. Mr Hikaru is temporary employed as a factory shift worker .The family does not have a Physicia n as their migration process has not been completed.

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, they have difficulties with the language, for which Me Hikaru attenda night classes for English. The family is unaware of the details pertinent to the schedule of vaccinations given for their children children till date. In view of the above,it would be greatly appreciated,if you could council the family regarding the schedule and importance of vaccination.

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has neurological check-ups as a part of her follow-up care once a month for the next three months. Yours sincerely Charge Nurse

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

218 words

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Some people think that watching sports is a waste of leisure time. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code.

Some people say that the main aim of advertising is to improve sales of products that people do not really need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the environment as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Lack of fresh water is becoming a global issue of increasing importance. what problems does this shortage cause? what measures could be taken to overcome these problems?