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It is sometimes said that borrowing money from a friend can harm or damage the friendship. Do you agree? Why or why not?

#money #friend #harm #damage #friendship
Many people
claims
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 that supporting a
friend
 financially can damage the
friendship
. I do not agree with
this
 statement because true
friendship
 is not based on
money
 but rather
support
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 and trust. Why do we keep friends if not for moral support and help
.
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We all have partners
in
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to
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which
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whom
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 we can turn
to
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apply
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whenever we are in need especially during
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a
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critical
situation
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situations
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. But what makes it even special is the fact that she will do the same in
a reverse circumstances
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.
That is
 why it is called
friendship
. Giving
money
 to a
friend
 does not harm the relationship but rather strengthen the bond we have . I think a true companion is someone that lift me up when
i
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 am in
crises
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. It is true that borrowing
money
to
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from
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 a
friend
 can make you feel septic because you are not sure if he is capable of paying
back
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it back
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 . That is where the level of trust comes in and I believe that
true
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 relationship is based on trust . In my personal experience, my
friend
 always
come
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 to me whenever she needs financial support because she knows I will always be there for her and I know her moral values. Like someone
said
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 « A
friend
 in need is a
friend
in deed
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indeed
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 ». To sum up , a true
friendship
 is not based on
money
 but rather
mutual
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 interest.Helping each other , morally, been supportive and financially present when we are the most in need is the true meaning of
friendship
.
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