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Band 5

The news media have too much influence on peoples lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that the advancement of news media is an adverse
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development,
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 as it has been influencing the public these days to a great extent. I completely disagree with
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 with, the public press is the most common way of receiving worldwide news. It helps individuals to stay up-to-date with current events happening in the world.
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, recently in Afghanistan, the Taliban took over
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 US troops
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 information spread like fire around the globe
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 the press.
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 could help thousands of people to escape their country
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 assistance received from various countries. Broadcast journalism plays a major role in keeping the public aware in terms of new diseases and vaccines. Advertisements and public awareness announcements are usually
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 when people watch the bulletin
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 informs viewers about
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 ailments.
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, in the recent scenario of
covid
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, as the virus was already a novel kind and there was not much information available, the presence of journalism made things easier for the general public to be conscious of. There is no denying that all broadcast sources cannot be trusted nowadays. They often give biased opinions on political discussions
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 could negatively impact human beings. They tend to hide the whole truth for their own benefit, especially if related to political parties.
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 could adversely affect the election results.
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 the media is not a reliable source every time,
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apply
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we cannot
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overlook
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 their benefits. They keep us informed of the latest news and bring people ‘s attention to new diseases
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, which
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 would be impossible without broadcast journalism.

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task response
Be clear on your view from the start and keep this view through the whole essay.
coherence
Plan your essay with a short intro that states your view, then 2-3 ideas in the body, and a short conclusion that restates your view.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas fit together, like and, also, but, then, so.
evidence
Give clear and exact examples for each idea so your point is easy to see.
language
Check for small grammar mistakes and use clear, correct words in place of wrong ones.
strength
A clear view is stated.
strength
Examples are used to back points.
strength
The writing is easy to read and the ideas go in order.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • life
  • today
  • agree
  • disagree
  • extent
  • much
  • too
  • can
  • should
  • good
  • bad
  • help
  • harm
  • think
  • know
  • use
  • read
  • see
  • hear
  • true
  • false
  • fact
  • source
  • time
  • way
  • plan
  • care
  • share
  • learn
  • idea
  • change
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