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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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While some people think that advancements in artificial intelligence will significantly enhance our quality of life, others are apprehensive about its possible adverse effects. Personally, I share both the fascination and worries about developments in
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 field. On the one hand, there are some obvious benefits that the increasing intelligence of technology are indeed in plain sight. The
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 advantage is that
machines
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 are clearly able to do many jobs better than humans can, especially in areas that require repetition, high levels of accuracy, or calculations using large amounts of data.
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, robots are being developed that can carry out surgical procedures with greater precision than a human doctor, and we already have cars that use sensors and cameras to drive themselves. The
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 benefit is that thanks to breakthroughs in satellite and spacecraft technologies, scientists will make more precise predictions about serious problems, including asteroid collisions, violent storms, global warming, prolonged droughts, or other extreme events, which might threaten life on earth. In fact,
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 technologies will steadily improve our quality of life.
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, it is reasonable for people to think that artificial intelligence may harm us if we are not careful. In the short term, it is likely that we will see a rise in unemployment as workers in various industries are replaced by
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 or software.
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, self-driving vehicles are expected to cause redundancies in driving jobs,
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 as lorry drivers or taxi and bus drivers, and manufacturing workers would soon be out of work because of the introduction of AI in factories. A long-term fear is that intelligent
machines
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 may become so smart that they could take control of humans one day in the future. Robots and computers might be able to make their own decisions without being given the permission and oversight of humans and without regard for our well-being. Without the necessary knowledge, skills, and experience, we might become their slaves, posing a serious threat to the entire world. In conclusion, while intelligent
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 will undoubtedly improve our lives in many ways, the potential risks of
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 technologies should not be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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