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In many parts of the world, people now often throw things away when they are broken and buy new ones, whereas in the past broken things were repaired and used again. Why do you think this is the case? What problems may it lead to?

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Different
people
 have different approaches to life. Across the globe, folks are now discarding things
oftenly
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often
 when they are damaged,
hence
, prefer to replace
instead
 of repairing as compared to
previous
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 era. According to
me
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 there are ample
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reasons responsible for
this
 attitude, in
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 of them along with the issues it can give rise to.
To begin
 with, the primary factor could be the easy availability of items. Nowadays,
people
 have flexible access to shopping
such
 as online with lots of variety to choose
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 terms of price and quality.
For instance
, China has made almost everything at a cheaper cost which
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 previously available only
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 branded labels.
Moreover
, the repairing cost is
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 higher than to replace.
Secondly
, while some
people
 are nowadays quite lazy to visit repairing
centers
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 others might me too occupied to get it done.
Nevertheless
, they find throwing away and buying a new one to be more convenient.
Lastly
, the newer generation does not have much emotional attachment with
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materialistic things as compared to the past when
people
 used to preserve things or valuables to pass it on to
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 generations. There can be some issues related to
this
 as,
firstly
, in order to meet the demands of
people
 the raw materials are used excessively leading to nature imbalance.
For example
,
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 reservoir is getting depleted used in manufacturing goods.
In addition
 to
this
, the use and throw policy is creating huge waste which gets accumulated as
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.
Furthermore
,
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 of
population
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 is losing the importance of reusable or recyclable goods as everything is so easily available.
For example
, mobile phones are now so conveniently accessible that it is more complicated and expensive to get them repaired. To conclude, development in today's world is the leading factor attributed to
this
 whereas in past
people
 use to travel miles to get some goods.Technology has brought
great
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 revolution in
people
's thinking
process
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 and
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
Nevertheless
, there is some negative side of each
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 while it is positive in myriad ways in terms of creating more employment and easy living.
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