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Some people think that parents have the greatest influence on their child’s academic development rather than the teacher. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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There is some dispute about whether the people having a more significant impact on
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children
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’s academic progress are their
parents
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 or
teachers
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.
This
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 is a complex issue, and my belief is that the impacts of
parents
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 and
teachers
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 on
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children
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’s educational development are of equal importance. There are two major arguments in favour of the fact that
parents
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 play a primary role in determining their
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children
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’s academic growth. The
first
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 rationale is that
children
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’ tendency is imitating people around them. In
this
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 case, fathers and mothers are the two people present for a considerable amount of time in
children
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' lives.
Likewise
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, to youngsters,
parents
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 are the ideal type that they always admire and want to become.
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,
children
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 will observe and gradually take after the characteristics and manners of their
parents
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.
On the other hand
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,
teachers
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, who are particularly well-trained in education, will be able to apply the appropriate method to teach
children
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.
Parents
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 sometimes are confused by many queries from their
children
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; meanwhile,
teachers
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 usually do not have any struggle in finding a way to explain things by simplifying matters so that
children
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 can easily comprehend. An additional point is that
teachers
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 are more likely to be strict and shape students into an educational framework. In
this
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 way, youngsters are more eager to learn and adapt to new knowledge in a disciplined way. In conclusion, while
parents
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 play an essential role in their
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children
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’s development, there are still occasions when
teachers
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 show more significant influence
in
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 a child's academic growth. The optimal method is perhaps to allow
children
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 to grow from both
parents
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’ and
teachers
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’ impacts.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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