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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Developed nations are introducing mandatory service programs for teenagers. Some programs like traffic awareness, sanitation, and rescuing wildlife. The main advantages are
children
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 can learn empathy from these activities, whereas negative effects are
children
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 may face some problems while working. On the one hand, some countries state that young
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 should
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 for a
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 in their under-graduation, they believe that with
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 kind of activities kids can learn about emotions and values. By visiting old-age homes and helping the needy
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, they can learn values from the seniors, who saw lots of ups and downs in their life.
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 introduces some lessons to them to develop their personality and make them responsible towards elders. Another advantage was, by saving the abandoned animals from food starvation, they will realize the value of how important food is for everyone. so from
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, they will not waste food.
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, some studies show that
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 who worked in Ngo camp or Redcross societies. they became more conscious and responsible towards
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 and society after the camp. The main disadvantages are,
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work
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 needs lots of effort and
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. some kids can't
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 for a long
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 because it very big task for them to
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 for the whole day, at the end of the day it makes them weak. because of
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-consuming to go out and help
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 may lose their focus on studies and can't complete their homework in
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,
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 may lead to getting a bad score on their main test.
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, A piece of news burst in Florida that
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 who went to help in some
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 event are caught with some health-related issues, because they worked in hard places,
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 made them sick. In conclusion, the benefits of involving
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 in
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 programs,
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 as helping old
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 and saving wild species, must be weighed against the drawbacks,
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 as illness and study-related issues are negligible.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invasion of privacy
  • personal space
  • media scrutiny
  • mental health
  • public figures
  • relentless pursuit
  • legal implications
  • ethical considerations
  • tabloid journalism
  • financial gain
  • public interest
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