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Some people believe online reading materials should only used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Overall, do you think that
propaganda
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 changed the course of
wars
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 in the past ? In my opinion, I think that
propaganda
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 was not only to change the course of
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 in the past, it
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 can change the
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in
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nowadays because
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any
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wars
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 around the world, they always want to make sure the
citizen
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citizens
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support
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 and follow them due to the right war which they make it.
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, they have to use
propaganda
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 to change the mind of
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 and seek
the
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support
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 from as many
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 as well.
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, in my country, in 1954 the civil war
seperated
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separated
 my country
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 two
side
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 including
South
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the South
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 of
Vietnam
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 which is under
Republican
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the Republican
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 Party and
North
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the North
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 of
Vietnam
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 which is under
Communist
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the Communist
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 Party. It's the same situation with Korea nowadays. North of
Vietnam
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 used
propaganda
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 to make many
people
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support
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 and follow them to attack South of
Vietnam
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 because they want to become a national unity under Communist Party. At the
monent
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moment
, many
people
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 have
realize
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 that they were wrong in the past because they believe in their
ideals
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ideas
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 and
support
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 them to attack Vietnamese
people
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 in
South
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the South
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 of
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. Unfortunately, they miss the boat. We don't have any freedom to express our opinion about everything
what
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 is
happning
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happening
 in our country, even they give us scaremongering if we have any acts which
looks
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 like opposition to the
gorvernment
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government
. Some activists are arrested for doing that.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online reading materials
  • printed materials
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • technology
  • convenience
  • interactivity
  • accessibility
  • visual appeal
  • physical books
  • parental guidance
  • digital skills
  • screen time
  • learning experience
  • personal preference
  • comprehension
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • word recognition
  • grammar
  • vocabulary development
  • reading habits
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