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Over population of urban areas has led to numerous problems Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle this problems.

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Introduction
It is irrefutable that
trend
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 of several
nattions
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nations
 of the world
are
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 currently facing the issue of
growing
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the growing
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 population rapidly in urban areas . both
individuals
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 and governments have
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a duty
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 to final solutions to overcome
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this problems
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this problem
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Body paragraph 1
Overpopulation can lead to overcrowding and poor quality housing in large cities poorly
heTing
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healing
heating
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 can cause illness , increase demand
of
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 food, health
cares
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, increased conflicts and
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 risk of large scale disasters like
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 pandemic.
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 serious consequence of overcrowding increasing is increasing the crime rate in
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the younger
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 generation and in case of poor conditions
individuals
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 use drugs.
Body paragraph 2
To begin
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 with, in terms of solutions , I believe that governments
is
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 largely responsible for
this
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 issue.
Firstfirst
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First first
 and foremost it
are
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 important that states should provide housing and health centres for all their citizens.
Secondly
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, providing more education and work facilities.
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, setting up community projects helps to encourage community spirit is a good idea
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 evening classes would keep them occupied and organised a tournament of crickets, football, wrestling for youngsters.
Body paragraph 3
Turning to
individuals
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 should
also
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 try to directions these issues.
Firstly
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individuals
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 put pressure on the governments to solve these problems. To ,
examplify
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exemplify
individuals
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 requested to government to make good roads, schools, community, centres in every city and adequate funds for all developments.
This
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reduce
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 the high level of crime.
Conclusion
In ,conclusion it is clear that issues caused by
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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 in cities are very serious yet if government and
individuals
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 share a collective responsibility,
then
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then
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 it may well become possible to offer some solutions.

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