The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Overall, do you think that
propaganda
changed the course of
wars
in the past ? In my opinion, I think that
propaganda
was not only to change the course of
wars
in the past, it
also
can change the
wars
in
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nowadays because
many
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wars
around the world, they always want to make sure the
citizen
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citizens
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support
and follow them due to the right war which they make it.
Therefore
, they have to use
propaganda
to change the mind of citizens and seek
the
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support
from as many
people
as well.
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, in my country, in 1954 the civil war
seperated
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separated
my country on two
side
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including The South of
Vietnam
which is under The Republican Party and The North of
Vietnam
which is under The Communist Party. It's the same situation with Korea nowadays. North of
Vietnam
used
propaganda
to make many
people
support
and follow them to attack South of
Vietnam
because they want to become a national unity under Communist Party. At the
monent
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moment
, many
people
have
realize
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that they were wrong in the past because they believe in their
ideals
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ideas
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and
support
them to attack Vietnamese
people
in
South
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the South
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of
Vietnam
. Unfortunately, they miss the boat. We don't have any freedom to express our opinion about everything
what
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is
happning
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happening
in our country, even they give us scaremongering if we have any acts which
looks
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like opposition to the
gorvernment
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government
. Some activists are arrested for doing that.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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