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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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It is irrefutable that these days, people are generating more and more
waste
.
This
 essay intends to analyse the reasons for
this
problem
 and suggests ways by which government alleviate the
problem
 of excessive
waste
. To commence with, there are ample reasons responsible for producing more and more rubbish.
First
 and foremost, we are living in an era of technology and globalization. So in every
next
 week,
products
 with new technologies are introduced in the market and everyone wants to experience the new technology.
Hence
, they started buying things of the latest version.
Therefore
, more electronic
waste
 is being produced.To illustrate, new models of television and mobile phones are manufactured by companies every
next
 minute.
In addition
 to it, manufacturing companies take advantage of media to popularise their
products
. They start giving repeated advertisements of their material which puts a huge impact on customer's mind and they end up with buying unnecessary
products
 .People fail to draw the line between necessity and indulgence and
this
 creates all the
problem
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.
On the other hand
, the government has to take a number of steps to combat its negative effects. They should focus on recycling electronic
waste
. For that, different organizations have to come into power
which
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 only
focus
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 on recycling procedures and keep an eye on the companies how much goods they are making if more than demand,
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proper fine should be imposed on them.
Furthermore
, strict laws would be made to make the
products
 which can be recycled and reused. Government should
also
 spread awareness in the society to reuse the material with the help of media. In a nutshell,
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production of excessive
waste
 is not a
problem
 of a single country , but the whole world is facing it.
The
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 number of steps should be taken by the authorities to stop it so that our environment would be saved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • disposable culture
  • over-packaging
  • non-recyclable
  • public awareness
  • waste management
  • environmental impact
  • recycle
  • recycling facilities
  • waste separation
  • single-use products
  • infrastructure
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