wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that various wild
animals
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are facing the problem of extinction. Some people would argue that preserving endangered
animals
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from dying out is useless and a waste of
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, while I do believe that actions from the government and individuals alike should be taken to protect the lives of endangered
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. Comparing with spending
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on the protection of
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, governments should allocate the budget
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other priorities.
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, the authority should tackle the problem of climate change. The problem of climate change has been caused by human activities. These activities include gas emission, water contamination, and air pollution. It is predictable that our human beings will be likely be erased on the earth in a couple of centuries.
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, the government need to invest
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in saving planets' resources.
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, alternative energy, like wind, solar and others, should be encouraged.
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, people could be beneficial from some other public areas in a faster way, like infrastructure, the healthcare system and others. Especially, the budget should go on improving the transportation system.
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may help to reduce economic disparities between regions, and it can
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attract investment from other powerful countries. The ideas mentioned above could be understood, while in my own opinion, it is highly unlikely that
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generations will see a bright
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without saving nature. An increasing number of wild
animals
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are likely to become extinct in the world.
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, the global environment and even humans are connected with each other. If we do not stop valuable
species
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from extinction, our earth would be damaged with them.
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, if organizations that protect nature will be given better financing support, their perspective and revolutionary projects would help to preserve endangered
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.
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, wild
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are the treasure on our earth. The subjects related to ecology should be taught from
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age in every school.
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will teach our
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citizens and representative of
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generations the importance of other
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and their impacts. In conclusion,
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benefits to spending
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on other public services, each country has the responsibility to protect wild
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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