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wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that various wild
animals
 are facing the problem of extinction. Some people would argue that preserving endangered
animals
 from dying out is useless and a waste of
money
, while I do believe that actions from the government and individuals alike should be taken to protect the lives of endangered
species
. Comparing with spending
money
 on the protection of
animals
, governments should allocate the budget
on
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 other priorities.
Firstly
, the authority should tackle the problem of climate change. The problem of climate change has been caused by human activities. These activities include gas emission, water contamination, and air pollution. It is predictable that our human beings will be likely be erased on the earth in a couple of centuries.
Therefore
, the government need to invest
money
 in saving planets' resources.
For example
, alternative energy, like wind, solar and others, should be encouraged.
Secondly
, people could be beneficial from some other public areas in a faster way, like infrastructure, the healthcare system and others. Especially, the budget should go on improving the transportation system.
This
 may help to reduce economic disparities between regions, and it can
also
 attract investment from other powerful countries. The ideas mentioned above could be understood, while in my own opinion, it is highly unlikely that
future
 generations will see a bright
future
 without saving nature. An increasing number of wild
animals
 are likely to become extinct in the world.
Animals
, the global environment and even humans are connected with each other. If we do not stop valuable
species
 from extinction, our earth would be damaged with them.
However
, if organizations that protect nature will be given better financing support, their perspective and revolutionary projects would help to preserve endangered
species
.
Moreover
, wild
animals
 are the treasure on our earth. The subjects related to ecology should be taught from
early
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 age in every school.
This
 will teach our
future
 citizens and representative of
future
 generations the importance of other
species
 and their impacts. In conclusion,
although
 there
some
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 benefits to spending
money
 on other public services, each country has the responsibility to protect wild
animals
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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