these days in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers ,particularly in secondary schools.what are the reason for this and how could the problem be solved?

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getting lower, especially in
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secondary education. In the following paragraph, causes and sensible solutions will be discussed in detail. The reason that why
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who can become a
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country
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is getting fewer is because the
teacher
in some country get lower
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teacher
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in Thailand
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only 500 USD a month for their
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secondary
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, the
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of educations
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this
age and they will have a number of problems in their lives that occurred when they become
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as love problem or financial problem that because of their poor family and higher education, so the secondary
school
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this
issue.
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, the government should raise
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salary
of
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appropiately
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appropriately
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with their job description and how many
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they have.
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secondary
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,
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teacher
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should not be the only
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who
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the
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issues, so
school
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the
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special service for their
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such
as student loan
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and depression advice
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. According to the information mentioned above, it can
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that low
salary
and strenuous work can cause a lower number of
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and it should be solved by raising
salary
and establishing other services for the
teacher
, especially in secondary
school
.
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