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Some people assert that it is good for college students to have part-time jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The importance and popularity of part-time
jobs
 have grown over the past few years. Some people argue that
college
students
 only concentrate on their major.
However
, I strongly believe that what
students
 have part-time
jobs
 should be spread widely.
To begin
 with, one advantage of having a part-time job is that
students
 have a good deal of experience through their work.
In other words
, the experience coming from the part-time job exert a great influence on selecting their full-time
jobs
.
For example
, if there were someone who
have
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 trouble
about
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 his major, he would still
agonizing
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 whether he
have
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 to keep going or not even after
admissioning
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admission
admissions
school
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.
However
, by behaving, they can judge what they choose about their
jobs
.
Furthermore
, they will take action on their major either changing or adding, or they will quite a
college
. Eventually, they will be able to draw their life
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 direction which they want. On top of that, there is another advantage of working as
part-time
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 worker. To be specific, they can learn
on
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a
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 sense of economy. For
instatnce
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instance
, our parents
be
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 willing to provide financial backing until we graduate our
college
.
Besides
, no parents want their children to go through
a
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hardship, even if they have a financial problem.
In addition
, they will learn about
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 of money and
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method
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methods
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 of spending money through suffering from
hard-work
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.
Therefore
, they will be able to have
a good habits
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 of spending money after
then
. In conclusion, it is clear that working as
part-time
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the part-time
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worker
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 is much harder while
students
 are studying in
college
.
Nevertheless
, I suppose that
students
 should have a part-time job
for
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 their
advantages
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time management
  • practical experience
  • competitive edge
  • responsibility
  • financial independence
  • budgeting
  • academic performance
  • relevance
  • professional network
  • burnout
  • balance
  • accountability
  • maturity
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