Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A section of people states that
parents
should educate their
children
to behave well with the outside community. Some people say that the main responsibility is on schools to make them responsible for
society
.
This
essay agrees that its parent's responsibility
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their
children
from their childhood. Every child's
first
lesson will be taught by their
parents
. Mainly about discipline, because in childhood no one knows how to behave and they don't even know what is wrong and what is correct.
Parents
should
very
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care full while they are handling
children
, they should try to give some spoon feeding about
society
and how they should behave after getting younger. Those messages will strongly store in their brain, and they will act
accordingly
to the information they got.
For example
, some reports suggest that
children
's brains will reach
to
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maturity after 4 years from their birth, so it's
duty
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for their
parents
to make them a better person in
society
.
Nevertheless
, after getting to teenage,
children
spent all their time in schools where they can learn many things and can share knowledge with others. The teacher's part is very crucial in their actions. Their impact will be more on
children
, so while educating them they should
also
be taught them about how to be a good companion with their fellow mates and
also
with people outside. Because it is very essential for them to learn that sort of behaviour while they are pursuing,
then
only they can lead a good relationship with others in their future.
For instance
, many studies have shown that students who are well behaved in their primary education can be expected to contribute more to
society
. In conclusion, childhood is a very peculiar age, if
parents
managed to give them proper knowledge about the outer world and how they should follow the rules and regulations.
Then
they can behave well in
society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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