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People living in the twenty-first century have better standards of living than people who lived in the past. To what extent [completely/ absolutely --- partly/ somehow] agree or disagree?

#people #century #standards #somehow]
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Some individuals believe that
people
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 who live in
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century
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 have quality living
standards
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 compared to the past centuries. I completely agree with
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 statement, and in
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 essay, I will explain the reasons why I agree with it.
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 with, it is important that the well-developed infrastructure of a country helps to improve the quality of living. Since there were no proper roads, public transports and other public
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 in the past,
people
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 who lived in that era had inconvenient lifestyles whereas, at present, most
people
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 are having a better lifestyle due to vast improvements in infrastructure.
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, in 1950, only rich
people
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 had vehicles and no proper public transportation system was there which made their
lives
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 difficult;
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, nowadays many individuals have their own vehicles and better public
services
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.
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, it can be iterated that
people
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 who are living in
this
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century
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 have better
standards
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 of living compared to individuals who lived in the past.
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, medical
services
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 have been improved in the present compared to the past. A few centuries ago, many
people
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 were losing their
lives
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 due to insufficient medicines, medical equipment and specialists doctors. To illustrate, millions of
lives
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 have lost for Spanish flu in 1918 as there were no proper vaccines to control the virus whereas nowadays scientists and medical researchers were able to found medicines for most diseases including the latest Covid 19 virus. Since medical
services
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 have improved in the 21st
century
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, it helps to save
lives
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 which make the living
standards
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 are better. In summary, it is intuitively obvious that
people
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 who are living in the twenty-
first
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century
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 has better living
standards
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 compared to the
people
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 who lived in previous centuries. Improvements in infrastructure, public
services
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 and medical
services
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 have resulted in better lifestyles for
people
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 in
this
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 era.
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