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some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Give reasons to your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #laws #control #amount #noise #person #disturbance
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Noise
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 can fill your ears and put you in tears.Give relax to your ears from
noise
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".Nowadays,
wheather
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whether
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laws
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control
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noise
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pollution
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 has created numerous controversies .some people hold the
believe
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 that rules and regulations to
control
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 excessive
noise
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 is advantageous.While
other
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others
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 hold the view that law enforcement is not beneficial.In my
opinon
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opinion
 law has
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a grat
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great
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grat
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great
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 influence
in
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control
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the control
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 of
noise
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pollution
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 due to
enviromental
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environmental
 and psychological reasons.
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 and foremost ,it has been argued that
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government
governments
goverment
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the goverment
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 need to form firm
laws
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 to govern
noise
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pollution
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 hampering
society
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 and its members.
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potentiaaly
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potentially
potential
 negative impact of
laws
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 must be taken into account.I still reckon that the existence of
laws
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 has in many ways enormously enriched peoples lives.
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 "NO HORN"rule around the city area has
progessively
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progressively
 contributed
in
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to
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noise
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 reduction leading to a
peacefull
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peaceful
hea
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sea
;
lthy
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thy
the
they
enviroment
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environment
.
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,A well known American scientist R.Buckerminter fuller once said ,"
pollution
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 is nothing but the resources we are not harvesting.we allow them to disperse because we have been ignorant of their value".
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Government
Goverment
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The goverment
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 should make regulations
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 as high incentives for
those citizen
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that citizen
those citizens
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 who violate
laws
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,settling industrial
area
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areas
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 far from living areas.
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,another factor that should
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 is
psychological
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the psychological
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 reason,as far as
society
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 is concern the ultimate aim of reducing and controlling
noise
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pollution
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 is to improve peoples mental health.
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 , A recent article published
on
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by
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 scientist
american
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reveald
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revealed
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 that about 1.2 billion people around the world
suffers
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 mental health issues due to
noise
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pollution
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 leading to problems
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 as depression,headache,irritation,
migrane
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migraine
 etc.
Undoubtly
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Undoubtedly
,
this
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 is a clear indication that
laws
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 should be implemented to protect people. In conclusion,executive bodies should make strong
laws
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 related to
noise
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pollution
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control
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 in order to lead a safe and healthy
society
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.To address
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issue
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issues
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 the
goverment
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government
 and
society
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 should make a concerted effort to find out solutions.
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