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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Equity between males and females has been a debatable issue during the past years including
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 acceptance. The equal split of the number of students of both sexes who should be accepted in
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 subjects has been raised several times. I totally disagree with that for two main reasons that will be discussed in
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, choosing a
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 is totally up to the person's choice according to his
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her own preferences and has nothing to do with his
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her gender.
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, males are more likely to choose subjects that have a high demand in the job market as business or engineering while females tend to go for schools that involve more mental than physical capacity as medicine or pharmacy and constrain from schools that require strenuous physical efforts as civil or petroleum engineering. The more someone knows what he
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she wants to pursue after college, the more he
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she knows what to choose in a
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, it is unfair to limit universities admissions to the number of genders who applies.
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 is going to oblige certain sex to apply for a
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 that he
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she doesn't want just for knowing that he
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she has more chance of getting accepted at
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 because of the gender roles.
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, a male might not apply for petroleum engineering
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 as he knows he will get rejected though he would excel in
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 because of
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 passion for it. In conclusion, the main driving force of someone's choice of a
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 is his/ her interests and has nothing to do with gender. Controlling the number of sexes in a
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 will deter students from what they want for the sake of getting accepted.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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