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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
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Teens
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 are the important assets of a nation; thereby inculcate free social services to the community could shape their
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 in an effective way and mould them
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better citizens. I totally agree with the aforementioned statement for the following reasons explained in the following paragraphs. The
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 and foremost benefit is that adolescents start understanding the importance and value of
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 society in which they live.
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, when the habit of offering social services to the older ones is instilled since the teenage, they would start interacting with
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 and can imbibe invaluable information from
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' experience.
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, juveniles would act more responsible and mature by watching and analysing aged peoples' behaviour.
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, the environment where we live
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affects us in
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way
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, so the habit of connecting our
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 is ingrained in them and in
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 it would become their habit that would be a win-win situation for our younger and old ones.
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, the free time that juveniles could invest in shaping themselves as
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good and humble
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 could be wasted by roaming here and there.
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, providing free social services to older citizens them to manage their
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 in a good way.
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, even in
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, the society could get enormous benefits from them, and our
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 would never feel lonely or depressed as their
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 are looking after them when they have spare time from their studies. To conclude
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,
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 phenomenon would
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 a win-win situation for both
teens
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 and aged people;
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 can polish and modify their behaviour by following and interacting
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seniors
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 while aged people
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 get a chance to engage with their
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 generation and
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 likely to feel isolated and depressed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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