Some people think that strict punishment for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety.
Some
people
think that strict punishment for driving offences are
the key to reducing Change the verb form
is
traffic
accidents
. Others, however
, believe that other measures
would be more effective in improving road safety.
Discuss both view
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views
ad
give your own opinion.
Some Change to a plural noun
ads
people
argue that having strict punishments for driving offences are the sliver
bullet to reduce Correct your spelling
silver
traffic
accidents
. However
, some people
believe that other measures
should be taken in order to improve the
road safety. In my opinion, I wholeheartedly claim that serious penalties are more reasonable solutions to reduce Correct article usage
apply
this
trend than having better measures
.
On the one hand, it is true that having hasher actions like fine
, Fix the agreement mistake
fines
canceling
licenses and locking up drivers who broke serious Change the spelling
cancelling
rules
into jails can decrease the risks of accidents
. For instance
, in Singapore
the Add a comma
,Singapore
rules
for driving cars are highly severe by government
. Correct article usage
the government
Moreover
, they make their citizens pay a lot of fines or putting them into the
jail at once if they have Correct article usage
apply
accidents
, which they thought those kinds of accidents
rigorous. As the
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a
results
, their country security systems for Fix the agreement mistake
result
traffic
accidents
are at a low level. Beside
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that
the drivers will become more disciplined and alert.
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,that
On the other hand
, I understand why other measures
are essential in maintaining traffic
orders. Furthermore
they can give drivers significant educations about the Add a comma
,Furthermore
traffic
, accidents
, as well as rules
and regulations when driving. Those can ameliorate the drivers’ knowledge. Nevertheless
, it will be boring if it is only teach
without limitations. Change the verb form
is only taught
People
might not voluntarily follow the regulations and would break them if possible. To exemplify, Myanmar, which is included in one of south east
Asian Add a hyphen
south-east
country
, has Fix the agreement mistake
countries
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
rules
and regulations.Hence
,most people
in that country disobey them when it comes to rules
. Additionally
, the
some Remove the article
apply
people
have less knowledge about driving measures
for some reasons
.Fix the agreement mistake
reason
Thurs
, the rate of Correct your spelling
Thus
accidents
has been increased.
By and large, it is undeniable that improving from both sides can get great results .I personally believe that having punishments is more benefit
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beneficial
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than
that
others.Correct your spelling
than
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