Topic 14: (25/06/2016) Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some

people

assert that

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policy makers

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should prioritize

national

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budget to empowering residents to maintain=adopt a healthy lifestyle rather than allotting money to curing ill

patients

since it serves no

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. In my personal view, I disagree with that viewpoint and I believe that two duties are equally important, so they deserve to be financially supported

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central authorities. Granted= admittedly, there is no denying that it is integral for governments to invest money in incentivizing citizens to follow a desirable lifestyle. One of the most cited reasons is that if

people

are health conscious, they are less likely to incur latent

diseases

in the long run, which not only deters them from life

threating

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threatening

treating

diseases

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but

also

avoids being a burden for their beloved ones and for the whole society.

For example

, young

people

have awareness of confining themselves to greasy and sugar fast food, carrying a high risk to their health; they will not possess a high incidence of getting those serious

diseases

such

as obesity or diabetes in their later life. Irrefutably,

although

diverting coffer to implement public health campaigns is of the essence, I chime with the idea that it is absurd to overlook=disregard the importance of curing

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ill

patients

.

Firstly

, if national officials do not financially subsidize

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sick

people

, it can take a heavy toll on both those

people

and the whole nation. Indeed, when

patients

with fatally contagious

diseases

are not treated, they unintentionally spread their illness to numerous other

people

, posing a detrimental threat to both the community

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and even worse, the whole population, triggering financial and mental burdens on central leaders.

Additionally

, helping and curing sick

people

lay a foundation for medical advances and represent a moral attitude and lifestyle of a nation. It is undeniable that while medical practitioners treat

patients

with unfamiliar symptoms,

breakthrough

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and medical leaps are uncovered, facilitating them to experiment to alleviate these

diseases

for the

next

patients

and usher new therapies in

medicine

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industry. In brief, I believe that national leaders need to apply two approaches simultaneously to promote residents to have good well-being as well as avoid potential risks and try exploring new strides in

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field.