A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in the cinema affects the actions of our young people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? What can be done to reduce violence in our society today?

Watching movies on television and in cinemas has become an indispensable part of people's leisure time in

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contemporary society. There is concern that

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of

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shown on these media means leads to the young generation absorbing a dangerous pattern of

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which in turn contributes to the rise in

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violence

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in our community. I

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and opine that there are several actions that can be taken to remedy

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problem. It is evident that movies shown on television or in cinemas have become more violent than ever before. By using myriads of effects and animations, adolescents experience not only instant thrills and gratifications by watching these movies, but

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absorb perilous behaviours

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, they may depict

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indirectly at the school or in society, contributing to the

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rise in

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in the community.

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awareness among

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generation about the danger, which youngsters often succumb to without being aware of it.

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, the most powerful solution could be to subsidise prominent action

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and actors to spread the message about the risk of adopting

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and the negative impact of it on individuals as well as in society as a whole.

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, parents should be involved early as possible in case of pupils exhibiting

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behaviour

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not complying with the rules

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in the school. In conclusion, it is evident that the proportion as well

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the severity

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of

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in televisions and cinemas has increased in recent years, which corresponds to the level of

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reported in our community. I believe that it is imperative that

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, moviemakers as well as parents try to combat

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development by every means they have

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their disposal.