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Some people believe that factories and private tour operators should bear the cost of cleaning up environmental pollution, instead of the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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There has been a growing controversy about who should take responsibility for the cleaning cost of environmental
pollution
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. While some people might argue that it should rely on the
factories
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 as they are the main
cause
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 of
pollution
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, others believe it is totally the role of the
government
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. In my opinion, I think the cost should be split between both parties and I will outline the causes in
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To begin
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 with,
factories
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 are indeed the driving
cause
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 of environmental
pollution
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. The toxic gases that they produce through their funnels as well as the huge amount of waste products that are continuously thrown into the sea threaten our planet and marine life. It is fair enough that they should pay for the cleaning up of their wastes and help to save the environment.
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,
factories
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 should buy filters to detoxify the gases coming out of their funnels.
Moreover
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, the expenses required for recycling
factories
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 wastes should be shared between the
government
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 and the
factories
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.
Although
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factories
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 represent the major
cause
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 of environmental hazards, they are not the only
cause
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 of these hazards. The running vehicles around the city and hospitals, as well as home wastes, represent another source of pollutions. The
government
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 takes the financial burden from these sources. The more financial responsibilities are put on the
government
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 the faster its resources get exhausted. In conclusion, as we are all living in the same environment the cost of making it a better one should be shared. Because the
factories
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 are the main source of
pollution
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 and the
government
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 have many financial burdens, they should share in the expenses required for cleaning up our beloved planet.
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