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Many famous players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays marketing has a great role to play in selling the
products
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. More and more renowned sportsperson are endorsing different athletic
products
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 strategy has myriad advantages compared to disadvantages. In
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 essay, I will be illustrating some of the benefits in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, the positives of
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 the negative side. Primarily,
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 players have a huge fan following which can have a significant impact on sales which is less possible when the product is advertised by a
non- celebrity
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non-celebrity
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.
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, some noted athletics do worry about their reputation and are hesitant to advertise fake or
low quality
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products
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, if the goods are genuine,
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 can bring a healthy change in society.
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celebrity tennis
player
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players
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 in India markets a herbal product which is found to
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 by many people and has ample
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good reviews.
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 but not the least,
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 of youngsters believe them as their mentors or icon and blindly follow their actions and try to imitate them as much as possible.
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, there are some drawbacks too.
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, some of the sportsmen can be greedy to publish their fake reviews for some brands,
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 can misguide society and can even cause harm to their bodies.
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 some sportsperson who advertised protein shakes and many teenagers took them without
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 consultation.
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,
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 has even caused them to lose their lives due to renal damage.
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, some of the manufacturers hike the prices of their
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 after getting
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 endorsed by a celebrity.
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, there is always two sides
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 a coin. To conclude with my perspective,advantages do outweigh
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the disadvantages. To avoid causing harm to
community
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the community
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, it is the duty of both
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 public and celebrities to make their decisions wisely and not misuse their power.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Endorsement
  • Influence
  • Brand ambassador
  • Consumer perception
  • Marketability
  • Publicity
  • Sponsorship
  • Testimonial
  • High-profile
  • Commercialization
  • Athlete's prowess
  • Brand loyalty
  • Impulse purchasing
  • Reputation
  • Scandal
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