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Your employer has recently allowed some employees to work remotely from home. You would also like to work from home. Write a letter to the HR manager for permission to work from home for the next six months. In your letter: • mention why you are writing • explain why you would like to work from home • say how this can benefit you and the company No need for address Start with dear Sir/Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Jagatheesan Manoharan and I am currently employed as a senior research scientist in the Chemistry department. I recently discovered that employees are allowed to
work
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 from home for
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months
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 and I am writing
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 letter to gain permission to
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 from home for the next six
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. The opportunity to
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 from home , especially during the next six
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 would be a great deal for me as my wife is travelling abroad for her
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 purposes and I have to take care of my kids and mother. As I have completed the research analysis, the next six
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 are going to be mostly data analysis which could be easily performed on my
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 computer and could be forwarded remotely to my manager
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 I could minimize time on travel and be involved in household duties.
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, it will reduce my benefits
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 as vacation, travelling and food coverage which could minimize the expenses on your side. It will help me to focus on my
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 and house which will minimize the stress and increase productivity compared to working on-site. I hope you will consider my request positively and initiate a plan with the management soon. Thanks for your kind consideration. Sincerely Yours, Jagatheesan

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task achievement
The letter opened with a clear purpose and maintained a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is crucial for formal correspondence.
coherence and cohesion
The writer structured the letter sensibly, with each paragraph addressing a specific point of the prompt.
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