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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion

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Nowadays, a lot of people use
computers
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 for learning. Some say that it has better advantages and others say it has negative results. In my opinion , I will discuss the advantages, as well as disadvantages and I, will give my personal opinion about it.
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, the majority of schools and institutes have now replaced books with
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. Especially during current pandemic situation.
students
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 are learning through online sessions. It would encourages
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 to use their
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 to do more research-based studies and can take voice-based lessons for
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 reference.
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 will
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 help children to use emails, Chats and has enabled them to conduct virtual presentations through Microsoft Teams and Zoom sessions on different subjects.
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, laptops are useful for Office workers as well. They can do a more complex analysis type of work and do things much faster than manual work. I believe that laptops and other tech gadgets are very useful for our day to day activities due to the above reasons.
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 there are people who will not agree with above the statement, especially the old people. They are not tech-savvy as they grew up with books and not with smart technology.
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 they will not understand the worth of these gadgets. To conclude, I believe that it is evident that
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 have a lot of value additions to
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. For that reason, I trust that
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 are very useful for everyone
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 to
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 and office workers. In my own opinion, I think they are comfortable because wherever you go, you can take them with you.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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