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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion

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Nowadays, a lot of people use
computers
 for learning. Some say that it has better advantages and others say it has negative results. In my opinion , I will discuss the advantages, as well as disadvantages and I, will give my personal opinion about it.
Firstly
, the majority of schools and institutes have now replaced books with
computers
. Especially during current pandemic situation.
students
 are learning through online sessions. It would encourages
students
 to use their
computers
 to do more research-based studies and can take voice-based lessons for
further
 reference.
This
 will
also
 help children to use emails, Chats and has enabled them to conduct virtual presentations through Microsoft Teams and Zoom sessions on different subjects.
Secondly
, laptops are useful for Office workers as well. They can do a more complex analysis type of work and do things much faster than manual work. I believe that laptops and other tech gadgets are very useful for our day to day activities due to the above reasons.
However
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 there are people who will not agree with above the statement, especially the old people. They are not tech-savvy as they grew up with books and not with smart technology.
Therefore
 they will not understand the worth of these gadgets. To conclude, I believe that it is evident that
computers
 have a lot of value additions to
students
. For that reason, I trust that
computers
 are very useful for everyone
in particular
 to
students
 and office workers. In my own opinion, I think they are comfortable because wherever you go, you can take them with you.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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