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Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

#people #teacher
In today's time where every information and knowledge is available on
finger tips
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, few
people
 think they can grab
these knowledge
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 or information better without any
help
 from a
teacher
, but on the other side there still few who thinks that having a
teacher
 is always better. My view regarding
this
 will be explained in
below
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To begin
 with, in
current
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 fast developing world, a person can get every bit of knowledge and information online with the
help
 of
internet
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, due to which these
people
 feel that they can understand and
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learn
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lean
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learn
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 a particular topic themselves without any
help
 from a guru and yes there are few
people
 who have successfully done that, example for these are
people
 like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, both these
people
 brought revolutionary changes in
tech
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 industry but these 2
people
 are college dropouts and they learn things on there own.
In contrast
 to the above, everyone is not as smart and talented as the
above mentioned
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 geniuses, for an average person learning new things alone may prove to be a challenging task. In these
situations
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 an expert can be very helpful, which is why everyone seeks
for
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the
help
 of a
teacher
. These experts have years of experience in a particular field and have explored each and every area of a particular subject making them the master of many things that might not be available online.
In addition
 to
above
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, a
teacher
 brings in a unique perspective in terms
to
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 a course because of the experience they have gained over the number of years which is very helpful to an average beginner. To conclude, according to
me
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 learning with the
help
 of any
teacher
 is always better
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that
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than
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 learning alone because a
second
 person always brings in a new viewpoint that
make
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 understanding something very easy.
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